I would like to visit Europe. I think it gives me an ewperience that I didn't get.
I heard it has a lot of cultural assets. I'm so interested. I want to see it.
I will visit Europe one day!
This is a good start, but it needs more details to be really good. Here are a couple tips: 1. To improve your topic sentence, add "...for a few reasons." or something similar. You could even make is more specific, for example, "I would like to visit Europe because I want to experience its cultural assets." Then your supporting sentences would discuss specific cultural assets.
2. You also need more detailed supporting sentences. What kind of experience would it give you that you didn't get? What are some examples of the cultural assets? Why are you interested? What do you want to see? Try to make your supporting sentences more specific. You could mention specific places and sights to really help your reader understand why you want to visit Europe.
I would like to visit to Eourope too!!especially I want to go to Germany~~
답글삭제This is a good start, but it needs more details to be really good.
답글삭제Here are a couple tips:
1. To improve your topic sentence, add "...for a few reasons." or something similar. You could even make is more specific, for example, "I would like to visit Europe because I want to experience its cultural assets." Then your supporting sentences would discuss specific cultural assets.
2. You also need more detailed supporting sentences. What kind of experience would it give you that you didn't get? What are some examples of the cultural assets? Why are you interested? What do you want to see? Try to make your supporting sentences more specific. You could mention specific places and sights to really help your reader understand why you want to visit Europe.
I like your concluding sentence!
Professor Treeful